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Many people think that home-cooked food is healthy, but many people still prefer eating out. Why is this so? Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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In
this
 fast phased life, and advancement in technologies we want everything to be easier , whether it is
a
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5 minutes
home cooked
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 meal or grabbing a snack from the corner store.
Home cooked
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 meals are healthier as you can control what's going into the making of it and
also
 it's tastier,
however
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 there's still a huge number of people who prefer eating out. In my
opinion
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this
 is mainly due to hack tick schedules
in addition
 to exhaustion.
Also
 because
that is
 the best to socialise.
Firstly
 in modern times a lot of time is spent at work, sometimes it's a
12 hour
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 shift or
14 hour
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 shift
then
 visit the shop to buy the necessities or do important chores outside of
home
 Upon arrival
home
, the person is extremely fatigued
hence
 opted for a nap and dining out
Furthermore
, in modern times, social media is the new big thing. A lot of people connect through social media,
example
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 Facebook. But a lot of folks still prefer the traditional way of socialising.
That is
 through
meet ups
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.
Hence
 the best option is
dinning
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dining
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 out.
For
example
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 going to a bar talking while ordering drinks and snacks. To summarise, everyone wants a healthy lifestyle,
however
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 due to long working hours and less free time, most
of
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the
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people prefers eating out.
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