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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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While many companies want their subordinates to follow a neat
dress
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 code, others believe that the way their dependants do their job is more important than how they
dress
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.
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 appearance plays a fundamental role within the workplace, workers should be addressed for their skills rather than their outlook. Some organizations might require their
employees
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 to wear in a specific way. On top of being more professional, workers should not wear carelessly because they represent their
company
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's image wherever they are.
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, when a dependant is dressing fashionably while heading to
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, they give excellent publicity to other people;
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, a good
company
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 will have smartly dressed
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. Since their
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 represents a professional context, workers ought to
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 appropriately at their
company
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. There is a common proverb saying that "the suit doesn't make the man." One's appearance can indeed change the way we look at them, but it cannot be the only aspect we observe when looking at the job they do. In the interest of the organization's profit, its
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work
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 smoothly and efficiently rather than wearing a nice outfit. In the end, the quality of
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 done outweighs a fashionable look. In conclusion, many companies argue whether establishing a
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 code or not for their
employees
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. In my opinion, appearance can not define the quality of a worker at all, but it can influence the
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's image. For
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 reason, I believe that companies should expect their subordinate to
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 appropriately at
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 but should not let one's clothing direct their judgement.
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