Nowadays parents put too much of pressure on their children to succeed. What is the reason for doing this? Is this a negative or positive development?

Today, forerunners force their kids so much to get success in the task. There are many factors in consideration to be considered. I explain each cause one by one and its impact on children
, in today's show-off, parents treat their child as a commodity to brag about in front of their friends, colleagues and relatives. They want their kid to do
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job in study or games so that they can praise themself in front of society that how disciplined and intelligent their infant is.
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have seen a movie in which a mother stops random people on the street to show them a magazine cover photo
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includes her daughter pic and,
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them meet her. The stranger congratulates her and she feels good afterwards.
, a couple wants their offspring to do well as they are aware of
competitive world. Nowadays, there are precocious students that are fully aware of what they want in their life. They simultaneously increase competition for teenagers who are not sure about what they want to do in their life.
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, my nephew at the age of 8, is getting swimming classes and have started preparing for the competitions at
a small age. The constant pressure on children to do a great job by their parent that led to negative development. Mostly, adults start seeing every task as a win or lose. They excessively put stress on themselves if they failed to do a particular thing. Pupils start doubting themselves and
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mental health issues like as per the report published by the ministry the suicide cases among college-going kids are increasing every year. In conclusion, there are many factors like fear of failure of parenthood and competitiveness that compel parents to put stress on kids which leads to their negative development as explained above in the essay.
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