Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considered to be meant for adults only. Obesity is a major disease prevailing among children. what are its causes and what solution can be offered.

Nowadays, it has become evident that the obesity of

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generation is a serious issue affecting health

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as diabetes, heart trouble, various cancers and so on.

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it is important

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steps to reduce the rates of obesity among

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essay will examine the major reasons for the

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and find some ways to tackle it. One of the reasons that the

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obesity

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in obesity

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in childhood is consuming junk

food

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and sugary drink.

Children

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often enjoy fast

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which

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a lot of fat and soft drink.

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, a recent survey shows that more than half of the primary students tend to eat prepackaged

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or sweetened beverage once a week. To address

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issue, the government should restrict these

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companies’ marketing which targeting for

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. Since kids are easily affected by deceptive commercials.

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, authorities should impose

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additional tax on junk

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and sugary drink

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so as to cut down

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consumption.

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, in order to

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childhood

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the childhood

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fatness rate, the state should play a leading role by

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of

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effective policy. Not only eating

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lack of exercise are a severe

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and a reason for overweight

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. In the past,

children

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used to play with friends in any park after school as they did not have many alternative playing ways.

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, today, pupils play even more at home with the internet or video games.

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, they do not have enough time to work out outside. To illustrate, recently, some

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researchers have revealed a report that around 35% of

children

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in the world did not exercise even 60 minutes a day which

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minimum recommending amount of activity time. To solve

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matter, parents must give their

children

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a sense of

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of activity for health so that their

children

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could work out frequently

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of playing

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unhealthy video games. For

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reason, parents should play with their kids outside regularly for controlling

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. In conclusion, the number of obese

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has been rising significantly

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result of

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diet and unhealthy lifestyle.

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,

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problem

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could be resolved by the state effective policy which protecting

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from unhealthy

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and by encouraging work out which parents lead their

children

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first

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at home.