Advertisements are becoming more and more common in everyday life. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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In today's materialistic world, advertising is one of the most important
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for marketing.
Companies
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advertise their
products
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on various platforms to promote sales and indeed it has been proved profitable by doing so. In my opinion,
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trend has more of a negative impact on society. We will be discussing
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the drawback in
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people
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come across advertisements almost everywhere, whether it is while watching a video, reading or just walking on the street. Many of these have immoral content which is unacceptable to society. Tobacco and alcoholic beverage producing
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promoting their
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can influence teenagers to get addicted to these bad habits. Though some countries have strict regulations on showcasing
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content on any
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of media, These
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market their brand through other accessories.
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, India has banned
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the advertisement
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of tobacco and alcohol
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,
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these
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promote their brand through music
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and soda beverages.
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, Advertisements can
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persuade
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for unnecessary spending. The demand for Luxurious
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which are mostly beyond affordability can have a negative effect financially.
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, Apple
iphones
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iPhones
iPhone
adverts are so compelling that
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purchase these irrespective of the price.
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,
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of these adverts can be
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an exaggeration
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of the actual product
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as
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Health
products
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convincing
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that their
products
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can make them healthy irrespective of the importance of exercise and
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diet. Whereas some showing medical plants in their advert
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can be easily mistaken for
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product
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by customers. In conclusion, I believe that advertisements have a negative effect on the customers since most of them only show the bright side of the picture,
ingnoring
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ignoring
the possible harmful effects it can have on the consumers.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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