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Advertisements are becoming more and more common in everyday life. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

#advertisements #life #development
In today's materialistic world, advertising is one of the most important
tool
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 for marketing.
Companies
 advertise their
products
 on various platforms to promote sales and indeed it has been proved profitable by doing so. In my opinion,
this
 trend has more of a negative impact on society. We will be discussing
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the drawback in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with,
people
 come across advertisements almost everywhere, whether it is while watching a video, reading or just walking on the street. Many of these have immoral content which is unacceptable to society. Tobacco and alcoholic beverage producing
companies
 promoting their
products
 can influence teenagers to get addicted to these bad habits. Though some countries have strict regulations on showcasing
such
 content on any
forms
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 of media, These
companies
 market their brand through other accessories.
For instance
, India has banned
advertisement
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the advertisement
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 of tobacco and alcohol
products
,
Therefore
 these
companies
 promote their brand through music
cd's
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CDs
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 and soda beverages.
Secondly
, Advertisements can
presuade
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persuade
people
 for unnecessary spending. The demand for Luxurious
products
 which are mostly beyond affordability can have a negative effect financially.
For example
, Apple
iphones
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iPhones
iPhone
 adverts are so compelling that
people
 purchase these irrespective of the price.
Moreover
,
Many
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 of these adverts can be
exaggeration
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an exaggeration
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 of the actual product
such
 as
,
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 Health
products
 convincing
people
 that their
products
 can make them healthy irrespective of the importance of exercise and
healthy
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 diet. Whereas some showing medical plants in their advert
,
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 can be easily mistaken for
herbal
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an herbal
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product
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products
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 by customers. In conclusion, I believe that advertisements have a negative effect on the customers since most of them only show the bright side of the picture,
ingnoring
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ignoring
 the possible harmful effects it can have on the consumers.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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