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It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime is a direct influence of the increase in violence in media. To what extent do you agree with the statement.

#crime #influence #violence #media
Nowadays,
teenager
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 crime is increasing day by day.
However
, a number of people think that
this
all
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 happening due to more communal publishing telecasts on violence. I
also
 agree with
this
 belief.
This
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 and
example
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. To start with, more youngsters are now exposed
of
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 social media violence now. The main reason being behind that more media shows, movies and songs are on lawlessness and rule
brakes
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breaks
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.
Therefore
, youths are always trying to follow them and
watches
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 them regularly. They want to follow the trend of it in real life. To cite an example, recently there was one video in which three Boys were harassing a policeman on
motorcycle
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. They were doing these all to make
video
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 of them and post it on civil publishing like Tick- TOK or Instagram merely for subscribers.
Furthermore
,
new
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news
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 about
violation
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violations
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 and
disturbance
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disturbances
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 in newspapers
are
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also
 another factor that
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affects
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effects
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 youths. Currently, more news in paper contains information regarding violation and killing which, has more adverse impacts on juveniles.
Moreover
, Facebook has become a platform to not only shows disturbance
on the contrary
also
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 like on it. To exemplify, a terrorist shot and killed
consequently
 a plethora of people at a church in New Zealand two years ago. And posed it live on. a number of youngsters watched that stream and commented on it
,
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 until the platform deleted the stream. To put in
nutshell
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, it is concluded that news has more adverse impacts on juvenile when they are streaming more lawlessness related shows, songs and movies on it.
consequently
, television plays a crucial role
for
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 violation and brutality among
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teenagers. due to the fact, when they watch it repeatedly they try to intimate it in real life. radio and
regulatory
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the regulatory
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 board should take into consideration all the adverse impacts on our society, and they need to reduce rampage in streamline.
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