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Nowadays parents are forcing their word to do part time jobs in their free time. write advantages and disadvantages of this phenomenon.

#parents #word #part #time #jobs #phenomenon
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The line graphs illustrate the information about the
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 of UK backpackers, who are travelling by three different types of vehicles including car,
bus
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 and
train
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 from 1970 to 2030. The figures are given in millions. Overall, It can be seen from the line graphs that backpackers have been travel by car, since historic years until for projection. Meanwhile,
bus
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 and
train
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 had contrasting trend with each other after the 2010 year. It is apparent that most of the travellers were using a car to go around more than
bus
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 and
train
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 by over the period shown. Significantly, between 1980 and 2000, was a dramatic movement with the
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.
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, in planning, it is expected that travellers will increase to 9
million
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 people.
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, two categories of vehicles had contrasted the
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 of passengers. Started in 1970, the commuters travelled by
bus
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, accounted about 4
million
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 and slightly fallen in followed years included to the forecast at roughly 2.8
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. While compared with people that used the
train
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. The
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 year, they had a
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 at 2.7
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 and
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, a trending rising
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 of commuters for projection, present for 4.8
million
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 backpackers.
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