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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages with living in house compared with living in an apartment?

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Nowadays, many people love to spend their life in a
house
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 whereas others think that living in an
apartment
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 will provide more benefits.
This
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 essay will discuss why there are more pros than cons in living in a
house
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 compared with an
apartment
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. On the one hand, there are several reasons why living in a
house
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 is superior.
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 of all, they have a lot of areas which can do several activities
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 as provide children to run around their home, playing the sport that may use a huge area.
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, my detached
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 has a garden beside a backyard where my family can plant lots of flowers because we have plenty of fields in our place. Another reason is that they are not attached to other buildings or neighbour rooms.
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 why a noisy sound will not disturb you.
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, living in an
apartment
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 may be beneficial in some situations.
This
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 type of accommodation is cheaper than buying an individual
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.
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, lots of university students stay in condominiums because they can rent and pay for staying costs each month.
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,
this
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 category of residence has drawbacks in lack of space and privacy. Extended families will not have enough area for their kids to play around.
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, you need to share facilities with other people in the building like laundry, pool and gym. In conclusion, they are some problems of living in an
apartment
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 about space and privacy. In my opinion, I believe that the positive of staying in the
house
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 has more than the negative aspect.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
  • suburban
  • rural areas
  • commutes
  • urban centers
  • public transport
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