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Some people say it’s a waste of time when plan future. Its more important to focus on present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #it’s #waste #time #plan #future #focus
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 planning in the future can provide the schedule's time more effective. While
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 think that to be
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concentrate
 in the present is more
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. In the following paragraphs, the reasons to support my agreement will be examined in
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detail. According to my opinion that
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 preparation can bring various advantages. As it helps us to able manage consequence lists to achieve the goals step-by-step.
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 more on
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Hence
, people who
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 plans, mostly are
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their
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work
. A good example of
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successful
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 people, will providing their plan for
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 day,
thus
 it helps them to not confusing for
work
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also
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In contrast
, with
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general
 without thinking planning list and focusing in specially present.
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 issue in the future. Since their process of
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 will not go
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through
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a production
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,
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some
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% of humans who looking for today, can leads they becoming
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unsuccessful
person
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people
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. It is apparent that pre
planing
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bring
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 by
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progress
process
 of thinking concept. In
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, I strongly agree with
this
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viewpoint
. Since it seems to me that having pre-planning leads to several
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such
 as in aspects of
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progress
process
 of thinking that outweigh the
backdraws
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back draws
 of having not
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, that can
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 to
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terrible
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