It is often said that aiming high is important for success. However, some say that keeping goals realistic is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Aims are extremely necessary to keep continuously going; life or journey would be meaningless without expecting something to achieve.
Nevertheless
, some people considered that set
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high goal to be successful life; diametrically opposed to
this
, others argue that targets should be realistic.
This
essay would make an attempt to discuss both
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of
views
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in the following paragraphs.
First
and foremost, a high target is
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driving force
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inspires someone to work hard relentlessly and make attempts to attain it irrespective of the hindrances.
Nonetheless
, folks who have high dreams perceived the problems
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in the way as stepping stones
instead
of
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on them.
For instance
, a college friend of mine wanted to become
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IPS officer, but he did not
had
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any financial support system.
Therefore
, he started tutoring
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10th and
12th grade
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students to allocate funds for his
further
education. As a tutor, he had gained enough knowledge to crack the IPS exam.
Thus
,
instead
of disappointing
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circumstances, one should always
held
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head
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high to gain what he
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.
On the other hand
, authentic targets enable us to feel confident and courageous to face the present difficulties; the achievements of real aims incite ones to put a step ahead towards the arduous path and fulfil high expectations. Apart from that, the failure in the expectations may
depressed
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the person and he is more tender to lose
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self-confidence.
As a result
, the human being may start feeling inferior in comparison to
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others. To conclude
then
, I
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the
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notion that the initial aims should be real
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so that one can get enough confidence, experience and adequate resources to take a step towards the tough target.
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