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It is often said that aiming high is important for success. However, some say that keeping goals realistic is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Aims are extremely necessary to keep continuously going; life or journey would be meaningless without expecting something to achieve.
Nevertheless
, some people considered that set
the
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 high goal to be successful life; diametrically opposed to
this
, others argue that targets should be realistic.
This
 essay would make an attempt to discuss both
point
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 of
views
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view
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 in the following paragraphs.
First
 and foremost, a high target is
the
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 driving force
which
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 inspires someone to work hard relentlessly and make attempts to attain it irrespective of the hindrances.
Nonetheless
, folks who have high dreams perceived the problems
occur
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 in the way as stepping stones
instead
 of
burden
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 on them.
For instance
, a college friend of mine wanted to become
a
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 IPS officer, but he did not
had
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 any financial support system.
Therefore
, he started tutoring
to
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10th and
12th grade
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 students to allocate funds for his
further
 education. As a tutor, he had gained enough knowledge to crack the IPS exam.
Thus
,
instead
 of disappointing
from
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 circumstances, one should always
held
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head
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their head
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 high to gain what he
want
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.
On the other hand
, authentic targets enable us to feel confident and courageous to face the present difficulties; the achievements of real aims incite ones to put a step ahead towards the arduous path and fulfil high expectations. Apart from that, the failure in the expectations may
depressed
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 the person and he is more tender to lose
the
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self-confidence.
As a result
, the human being may start feeling inferior in comparison to
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others. To conclude
then
, I
am inclined
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the
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 notion that the initial aims should be real
,
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 so that one can get enough confidence, experience and adequate resources to take a step towards the tough target.
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