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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Every
country
 has its own cultural background to which some believe that the visitors should
also
 adhere, while another group denies imposing
such
 awkward restrictions that would make the visitors feel uncomfortable. I would have to agree with the latter as I feel it isn't a piece of cake to adapt to a new traditional custom, especially if
its
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 a short
visit
 to that
country
. There are opinions that foreign visitors should try to adjust to the cultural practices of the visiting
country
 as their way of dressing, behaviour and dining habits may drastically differ among the residents of the touring place.
This
 may showcase the
tourists
 separately from the others, which could draw unnecessary attractions among the local citizens. As most of the
tourists
 are usually unaware of the rules and cultural restrictions imposed on the foreign soil, their acts may infringe the local rules leading to punishment or hurting the feelings of the locals. One
such
 significant incident was the arrest of the French Prime minister on Indian soil due to the public display of affection towards his wife on his
visit
 to India.
However
, I firmly believe that suffocating the
tourists
 to pursue the cultural traditions of the touring nation is not fair as it would significantly affect the tourism of the
country
. It would create a bad impression among the
tourists
 as most of them would have travelled mainly with the intention to
visit
 famous places rather than exploring the customs of the local population. One cannot be forced to follow a different diet, spiritual beliefs and behaviour towards fellow countrymen just because they are in a different
country
 with
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 culture. To conclude, I stand with my statement that foreigners should not be forced to follow the traditional customs of the visiting
country
 as it would cripple them being unable to adapt to the new traditions.
Instead
, letting them free to enjoy the
visit
 in their natural way would help both the locals to learn a different culture as well as enhance the experience of
tourists
 on their
visit
 to the dream destination.
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