More and more people are moving to big cities these days. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of living in a large city.

It has been observed that large metropolitan
cities
are attracting a substantial number of masses who choose to migrate towards
such
cities
.
This
essay compares both sides and underscores why
people
move to big
cities
in search of greater income and technologically advanced facilities that make their lives easy and convenient ,while how
people
have chances of suffering from health concerns due to pollution in the
cities
. Certainly ,
one
question that intrigues me is what are the possible merits of migrating to metro
cities
? Clearly , living in a big
city
brings plentiful opportunities for growth and expansion to the
people
.
In other words
,
one
could access world-class education either at schools or universities with advanced infrastructure due to a wide range of options available in the developed
cities
.
This
is exemplified by Mumbai,
one
of the biggest metropolitan
cities
in India which has more than five universities ranking in
top
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50 of the world.
Besides
this
, being in a big
city
, thanks to all state of the art infrastructure development, inexorable increase in IT industry , profound growth of manufacturing plants,
people
get tons of employment opportunities which results in improved financial stability./ resulting(verbing ) in
increase
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in earnings of the
people
. Having said that , unfortunately,
such
development is accompanied by a deluge of adverse outcomes . For
one
thing, in order to reside in a
city
,
one
has to shell out extra bucks , which can take
toll
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upon
one
’s financial health ..
People
,
for instance
, pay house rent three times higher than in
the
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small town.A far more serious concern / What is more worrisome is metro
cities
are plagued with concerns of rising levels of pollution ,hustle-bustle in the
city
, traffic bottlenecks .
For example
, the polluted environment in the
city
not only affects
one
’s pulmonary breathing capacity
,
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but
also
carries the threat of cardiac diseases
such
as ischemic heart problems that can result in fatalities . In a nutshell
/
In conclusion , there is definitely a good side to moving to the big
cities
to explore better life and job opportunities;
however
,
one
should
also
be careful / cautious about increasing expenses
such
as more expenses as well as the threat of pollution which can compound health
crisis
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.
Therefore
,
one
has to decide upon the place of residence by analysing the priorities and needs of
people
.
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