some people believe that Government money should be spent on important things rather than arts such as painting and music. To what extent agree or disagree.

Government
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in some countries allocate more resources
on
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paintings, music. I completely disagree with
this
statement and it is a waste of money and
this
money should spend on public services
such
as
education
and health
care
.
To begin
with,
education
is the most significant aspect rather than creativity, the cabinet should be spent resources to
education
sector meanwhile, the schools and universities would have a modern classroom and lab
thus
, many students will get more benefit from
this
.
For example
,
Indian
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the Indian
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cabinet has been starting smart class for a decade in their's all schools through spending a lot of resources to drilling section
as a result
, Indian students have a better and modern
education
than ever past.
Moreover
, when the authority spends a huge amount of capital
to
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schooling while certainly, will increase the number of graduate ratio
thus
, the country's economy would be advanced from them.
In other words
, the qualified teachers would be appointed by giving
a high salaries
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to teachers in order
to
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the students will get
a better knowledge
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better knowledge
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from their's professors.
Furthermore
, health
care
is the inevitable basic
needs
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need
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for human lives, the cabinet should not be allocated capital to
unuseful
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the unuseful
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sector
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sectors
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such
as arts. The ministry should be arranged for all new medical
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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and specialist doctors through the huge cash
gives
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give
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.
For example
, many developed nations provide
a
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apply
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free medical
care
to their's citizens
thus
, they put
a
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more effort to increase the productivity
by
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workforce
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the workforce
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.
Moreover
, the ministry should ensure to arrange the modern hospital amenities are available in
countryside
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the countryside
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like cities
hence
, the authority should be given a huge capital to improving the health
care
field than paintings and music. To conclude,
education
and medical
care
both are like
a
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two eyes
therefore
,
this
is the predicament aspect of every nation and no one escape from
this
.
Hence
, in my opinion, about
this
, I completely disagree with
this
idea which is spending
a
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money on arts. I hope
this
trend is conducive to building a healthier and cognitive society.
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