some people believe that Government money should be spent on important things rather than arts such as painting and music. To what extent agree or disagree.
Government
in some countries allocate more resources Correct article usage
The government
on
paintings, music. I completely disagree with Change preposition
to
this
statement and it is a waste of money and this
money should spend on public services such
as education
and health care
.
To begin
with, education
is the most significant aspect rather than creativity, the cabinet should be spent resources to education
sector meanwhile, the schools and universities would have a modern classroom and lab thus
, many students will get more benefit from this
. For example
, Indian
cabinet has been starting smart class for a decade in their's all schools through spending a lot of resources to drilling section Correct article usage
the Indian
as a result
, Indian students have a better and modern education
than ever past. Moreover
, when the authority spends a huge amount of capital to
schooling while certainly, will increase the number of graduate ratio Change preposition
on
thus
, the country's economy would be advanced from them. In other words
, the qualified teachers would be appointed by giving a high salaries
to teachers in order Correct the article-noun agreement
high salaries
a high salary
to
the students will get Change preposition
for
a better knowledge
from their's professors.
Remove the article
better knowledge
a piece of better knowledge
Furthermore
, health care
is the inevitable basic needs
for human lives, the cabinet should not be allocated capital to Fix the agreement mistake
need
unuseful
Add an article
the unuseful
sector
Fix the agreement mistake
sectors
such
as arts. The ministry should be arranged for all new medical equipments
and specialist doctors through the huge cash Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
gives
. Change the verb form
give
For example
, many developed nations provide a
free medical Remove the article
apply
care
to their's citizens thus
, they put a
more effort to increase the productivity Correct article usage
apply
by
Change preposition
of
workforce
. Add an article
the workforce
Moreover
, the ministry should ensure to arrange the modern hospital amenities are available in countryside
like cities Add an article
the countryside
hence
, the authority should be given a huge capital to improving the health care
field than paintings and music.
To conclude, education
and medical care
both are like a
two eyes Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
therefore
, this
is the predicament aspect of every nation and no one escape from this
. Hence
, in my opinion, about this
, I completely disagree with this
idea which is spending a
money on arts. I hope Remove the article
apply
this
trend is conducive to building a healthier and cognitive society.Submitted by reanudeepan on
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