Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, as technology and the internet are developed rapidly, using social
media
like Facebook, Instagram and Whatapp's have become a trend in all generations. While, there are some drawbacks when
people
fill up their personal
information
such
as
phone
number
, birthday and the school they went on these kinds of programs.
This
essay totally agrees with
this
statement,
people
are at a high risk when they sharing their private
information
. There are several reasons to support my agreement.
First
of all, if
people
share their
phone
number
on social
media
it might lead to some unnecessary scam
phone
calls and messages from the person who try to scam
you
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them
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. Because they seeking the
phone
number
all the time and they do not miss any opportunities to scam on you.
For example
, recently I decided my
phone
number
on Facebook,
then
I got a
phone
call which prepending my bank staff to call me and try to check my bank details.
Therefore
, we should protect our personal
information
as privet as we can.
Moreover
,
this
increases the chance for the criminal to claim on you and hack
to
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your technology devices like your smartphone and computer.
For instance
,in a recent report for the police officer in WA, the
number
of cyber craim like bank hacking and virus on the personal devices are enhanced by
people
who have not protected they
information
well. Which mean we should not share our personal
information
in the public
media
. To sum up, Social
media
seem to be convenient to our daily life,
however
, we should protect our personal
information
to advise the risk of scams or claims.
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