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You need to take some time off of work to go on holiday. Write a letter to your direct manager. Ask for time off and explain why. Provide the dates and times for which you will be unavailable to work. Describe what you will do to prepare or make up for your absence.

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Dear Katrine, I am writing to you with a request to grant me an unpaid leave of absence for a month. Due to overall fatigue and tension in my health, I require to take a rest and receive treatment for a while. As you know, recently we successfully dealt with a huge project which had an immense impact on
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 our corporation.
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, because of
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 I needed to work overnights at times.
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 influenced my physical and psychological state in a bad way. As a consequence of
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, I am even struggling to concentrate on my work accurately.
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early August to September and return back with a fresh intention. Upon your approval, I would like to make some plans regarding my leave. We have already agreed with Kathy to cover for me during my absence. So that, she is totally in charge of my responsibilities.
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, I would be fully available via phone, as well as email. I assure you that, in absence will not have any adverse effects on
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 of our company. I look forward to your response and I would greatly appreciate your confirmation in
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 matter. Yours sincerely,
Mrs.
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 Parvina.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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