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Some people say that computer have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. Discuss and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, many people in the world
use
 computers in their daily
life
. Some people think that
computer
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computers
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 could make them more comfortable but others reckon that could make them complicated
instead
. Both of these contrasting viewpoints will be discussed in
this
 essay along with my opinion. Undoubtedly, the majority of people
use
 computers to be their facilities to do anything in their
life
.
For instance
, computerize the writing for works or studies. They can
use
 laptops to be a time savers for them and assist their
life
 comfortable as well. In the past students need to prepared many educational tools or amenities in one backpack for their achievement, but now they can just
use
 one laptop to finished all tasks on time. It appears that
computer
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 can make
life
 much
more
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easier
However
, using computers
also
 has some advantages
for example
: in the old generation like our grandparents, they could not fully understand and truly access
this
 kind of technology as well. Some of the
programme
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 is very perplexing for them to
use
.
Moreover
 for another obvious example is not all households could have the purchasing power to effort electronic devices. According to
me
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, personally ,speaking I think that I tend to agree with a
computer
 could make my
life
 much more comfortable with the reasons as the aforementioned. To conclude, Some crowd believe that laptops have much more advantages than disadvantages. While some don't, but for
me
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 I think I prefer to have
computer
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, which always
help
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 me finish my work on time.
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