Mobile phones should not be used in public .Do you agree or disagree.What's your opinion

Some
society
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believe
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that the telephone should not be used in public. I disagree, there are three positive points.
For instance
, many
people
are updated the news by the contact, the mobile
phones
can
use
pay on the
supermakets
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supermarkets
supermarket
without the cash, and the mobiles have the good camera which
is take
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a photo easier than the other cameras. Nowadays. the technology of
moblies
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mobiles
is improved by an inventor, so all of
people
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prefer to
use
phones
in society than in the past.
Additionally
, there are three pros views
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will
be discussed as the following.
Firstly
, the news is announmented
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the internet.
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, some of
a
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ergent
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urgent
recent
news is had during the
people
is in the public.
Secondly
, in the present is cashless
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which is useful if
people
will purchase products by mobile banking, so it is easier than
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some of
money
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which is cash and must
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be exchanged in sometimes.
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Thirdly
Friday
, the
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is interested in
take
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a photo and send to their family.
For instance
, there are
a
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chat grounds which are
closefriends
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close friends
or families member in the online's
appication
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application
,
therefore
when
people
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travelling to the new places they need to take a photo to send to someone in online social. It is hard to avoid
to
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use
moblie
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mobile
phones
in the
publice
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public
while
the
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innovation and
teachnology
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technology
are
growth
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more and more. In conclusion,
the
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phones
should be used in the public for numerous reasons as I discussed above. In my opinion, there is an advantage than a disadvantage.
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