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some people believe that it is better to live and work in a vertical city with multiple tall buildings, as compared to a horizontal city with fewer tall buildings. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some individuals believe that living in a vertical
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 is comparatively much better than living in a horizontal
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. In the earlier days, people used to live in a horizontal
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 rather than in a vertical
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. Whereas ,they use to have a large house , a place to have a fun time in the evening and a garden. Which helps them to have some activities like gardening and playing games. Nowadays, we can see that the population is growing drastically which is leading the
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 to become a vertical
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 development. People living in a horizontal
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 have a place to do some activities which benefits them to have
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good health and motivation. Here we can innovate our houses as we like. A small population will not lead to more pollution. Living in vertical cities is more expensive compared to a horizontal
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. Separately we have to take care of our water supply, electricity bills and other facilities like swimming ,games need extra pay. As the population will be so high which leads to pollution, as the tall buildings cannot to innovated frequently and will have less space for anything to do like celebrating on an occasion. Children will not have enough space to do extra activities but we have the advantage of starting a new business that will help us to create more income than compared to starting a business in a horizontal
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. I believe that living in a horizontal
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 will make our life easier and healthier.
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