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Some people think that watching sport is waste of leisure time. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, sports have earned countless
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viewers all around the world like never before.
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, some reckon it is a wastage of leisure
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 for
people
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 who watch
sport
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. I agree to some extent with that statement and
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 with, the majority of
people
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 who contemplate
sport
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 are usually admirers of a team or an athlete. Being a long
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 and loyal fan might be the reason why they have
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 passion for these recreational activities. They consider it as a part of their life as if they were to worship a god. That instilled passion drives them to always follow their favourite clubs or athletes.
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, Ronaldo and Messi have an unbelievable fan base and Manchester United and Real Madrid have the most supporters on the planet. That said, sports can be considered to form part of many
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's lives.
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, admiration can become an obsession. Many individuals tend to spend
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 amount of
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 on their favourite game.
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, it leads them to waste a lot of
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 and energy in vain where they could have used them to do something productive. Being a fan is not a problem but there must be a limit. These moments could be
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 dedicated to oneself where talents and skills could be developed.
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, these precious hours could be spent
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learning and performing a
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.
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, in my locality, there are football matches that are organised for the local
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 each week.
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, enjoying oneself by doing some physical activities could be an alternative. In conclusion, it cannot be denied that someone can be a
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sport
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 viewer but it must not become an obsession. Leisure
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 must be used wisely and always ask yourself if you are being productive or not.
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