You recently attended a sports event at a local stadium. However, you were disappointed because some spectators behaved badly and affected your experience. Write a letter to the manager of the stadium. In your letter: •Introduce yourself •Describe the problems caused by the spectators •Explain what action you would like the stadium management to take

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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letter to express my disappointment regarding the unacceptable behaviour of the spectators during a sports event I attended
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week.
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, spectators occupying the front row brought oversized boards with them and
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visibility of the stadium for people sitting behind. I tried to politely ask one of them to lower the boars, but he gave me a stern glance.
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, people sitting in the back rows were throwing the empty bottles at other spectators. A female sitting by me got injured with their bottle. It completely ruined the experience I had come to enjoy. I would like to suggest allowing only
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size of banners and boards inside the stadium during matches.
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, to ensure public safety during future events, management should improve the security system and involve local authorities to deal with individuals who throw objects at others.
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, clear guidelines regarding acceptable behaviour should be announced during matches. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to attending future events with a more pleasant and enjoyable experience. Yours faithfully, Daljeet Singh

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Score: 7. Say a little more about yourself, such as your name and where you sat. This will make the letter more complete.
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Ask for a clear next step, for example: “Please reply to tell me what you will do.” This can make your request stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 7. Keep one main idea in each part. Put the board problem in one part and the bottle problem in a new part.
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Use clear links between the problem and your request. For example: “Because of this, I ask the stadium to...”
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You cover all three points: who you are, the bad acts, and what the stadium should do.
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Your ideas for safer events are clear: limits on boards, more security, and clear rules.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, body, and end. Your opening and closing are good for a formal letter.
coherence and cohesion
Words like “Firstly”, “Moreover”, “Additionally”, and “Furthermore” help the reader follow your ideas.
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