Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important Environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is clear that
environment
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has a crucial role in our life. There are different viewpoints toward finding
main
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issues in our environment. Some people believe that major
problems
in
this
regard are excluded
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extinction of some special creatures.
However
, I would agree with those who believe that other
problems
should be taken
consideration
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. On the one hand, modern people
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to think that
most
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important
problems
concerning
environment
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the environment
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are because of the
disappearing
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some
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of some
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animals and plants.
This
is because
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the ecosystem
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will be affected by
the
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some unique creatures.
For instance
, by
extincting
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extinction
extracting
one species like
lizard
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a lizard
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, the food chain of one special bird will be destroyed and as
result
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all the following species will be suffered from. As an illustration, some trees and plants are responsible to create oxygen on the earth and a little change can
brings
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up a catastrophic in making o2
consequently
.
On the other hand
, in my
opinion
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there are several factors that are more important than
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of some mammals or plants. Due to the industrialization and digitization in the world, the number of industries which have produced Co2, have increased dramatically and
therefore
the amounts of Co2 emission which is the main cause of
the
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global warming have been rose
consequently
.
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, due to the advancement in transportation facilities, the numbers of commuting around the cities have been
growth
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sharply and
therefore
some diseases related to the pollution have
been emerged
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. In conclusion,
although
changing
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in
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
an ecosystem
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has impacts on
the
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environmental issues, I believe the main reason of the world
problems
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been originated by human decisions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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