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Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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In most countries, a significant amount of budget spends on public
services
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 like health facilities or insurance, schools and science investigation, etc. and part of it spends on art activities like theatres and music. Some
people
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 argue that art’s investments are not necessary
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,
governments
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 should invest just for public service. I think that arts are important as well as public
services
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 in
society
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. On the one hand, public
services
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 are vital for most countries so government should spend more on those.
Services
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 like school or hospital make the foundation of every
society
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 which improve the level of
people
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 life. Children should be thought of in the best way because they are who will make profits for the social and economic part of their future
society
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.
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,
governments
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 should concern about the health level of their countries and prepare more health facilities like hospitals and even gyms which help to have healthy
people
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 who can work more effectively for the community that it is beneficial for
governments
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 as well as themselves.
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, art is an essential part of not only
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’s lives but
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governments
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. Throughout history, some art events like concerts or theatres have been an important aspect of
people
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's social life. Those are kinds of entertainment for
people
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 which help to raise the level of happiness and energy in
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. While
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 is the one of noticeable concern of all government budget plan to spend for art’s event annually. In sum to, the spending money for arts not only is not waste but
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 it is vital for
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.
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, I think a big amount of the government’s budget should spend on public
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 which are
people
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’s fundamental needs.
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