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Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However the government of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is totally indispensable that advancement in certain factors
such
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 as healthcare,education and trade are crucial for the development of
the
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impoverished
nations
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This
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 has become a controversial issue as some folks think that
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the government
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government
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governments
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 of affluent
nations
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 should take more obligation on aiding penurious lands in
such
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 areas while others contradict it.I agree with
this
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 notion to a certain degree but still with
certain
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caveat
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. Analyzing the statement and examining
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,it is indeed true that well-to-do
nations
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 are far ahead of impecunious
countries
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 not only in terms of technology,health services but
also
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 with regards to education and trade.Thence,sharing some advanced technology and methods in the aforesaid fields will not be a serious burden for them while it would be of substantial assistance for indigent people.What is more, more scholarships should definitely be provided for those necessitous
nations
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. It might be the downright underlying reason
of
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 making an academically outstanding
student lead
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 into a better future. It would be
pertient
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pertinent
 to mention that organizing some seminars and campaigns on health and trade can not only promote the physical well being of the citizens but
also
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 enhance the local business and international exchange market of a particular country.Eventually,global organizations like WHO and
NGO
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NGOs
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 ought to give financial aid
for
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third
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 world
countries
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,albeit not substantial sums of money.
On the other hand
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, the sole reliance on international help would have
detrimental
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 impact on the promotion of a country.Categorically stating, the government and authorities of indigent
countries
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 should impose
long- term
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long-term
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 plans and implement them as soon as possible.Only
then
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, they will be able to keep abreast with developed
nations
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 in the upcoming decades.Japan would be the most striking example.Notwithstanding the humongous damage during the war, Japan somehow could manage to rehabilitate and now,it has even become one of the most industrialized
nations
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 across the globe. To
recipulate
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recapitulate
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,I advocate the ideology of
prosperous
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a prosperous
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 society being more responsible to assist destitute communities.
Neverthess
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Nevertheless
, the aided
countries
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 should endeavour themselves to augment
skills
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their skills
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 and qualifications in
aforementioned
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 domains.
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, there may be unanticipated adverse repercussions regardless of the contributions of wealthy
nations
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • essential
  • development
  • poorer nations
  • government
  • richer nations
  • responsibility
  • assistance
  • capacity
  • resources
  • collaboration
  • effective
  • sustainable
  • shared
  • non-governmental organizations
  • empowering
  • local governments
  • communities
  • investing
  • infrastructure
  • capacity-building
  • financial aid
  • technical expertise
  • knowledge transfer
  • improvement
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