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Many people believe that scientific research should be carried out and controlled by government rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Scientific research is a “catch-all” term to illustrate the analysis of science in every domain of our life from behavioural mechanisms to the formation of subjects.
As a result
,
this
 leads to the questioning against the ownership of these
experiments
 between the national authority and the financially independent labels. Personally, from the viewpoint of a bystander, I perceive that neither of them outweighs the other. In terms of the science-based studies, they leave an annual financial burden on the involved partners’ budget which in the long run, is a contribution to the depletion of the governmental revenue. Every year, the regularly updated statistics have supported the idea of huge investment in
this
 field that mere cost for the maintenance of labs’ facilities has burned billion dollars from the investors.
Moreover
, when it comes to the national pocket, most of it is from the mandatary tax policy from the domestic revenue which will see the occurrence of protests on the rising of tax for
such
experiments
.
Therefore
, in regard to the financial maintenance in
this
 field,
this
 will leave the companies an upper hand to handle.
However
, on the other side of the coin,
this
 puts a concern on the surveillance of these scientific
experiments
. Without national supervision, the conduction of these
experiments
 lays a worry in their consequences which are hidden from society. In the mid of 19th century, without the control of the authority, many unethically psychological
experiments
such
 as Stanford prison
experiments
 had been conducted which had resulted in far-reaching continuous consequences to the involved participants and the society as a whole till here and now. In conclusion, as it has shown that each of these owners has their own strong suit, I am still quite sceptical to come to the very
last
 decision between them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific research
  • socially responsible outcomes
  • corporate profit
  • profit motives
  • fundamental areas
  • long-term societal development
  • innovative research outcomes
  • mixed approach
  • stifle innovation
  • bureaucratic processes
  • breakthrough projects
  • commercial gain
  • scientific progress
  • public access
  • government funding
  • private sector
  • public benefit
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