in some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. what is your opinion about this?

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Safety has always been human beings'
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issue and it was considered as their
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priority. Nowadays, with the growth of ,violence many parents are alert about their children's safety.
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why in some regions of the US, an important law is set which prevents youngsters from being outdoors after a specific time at night. The only way they can be outside is by being accompanied by an adult. I personally disagree with
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an idea. It is true that the outside world is a perilous place,
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banning
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from going outdoors at night is not the right solution. Not only is it everyone's natural desire to be safe but, it
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is their lawful right so being taken away from
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a right is not going to solve the problem. So when it comes to
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the situation becomes even harder, because they are more rebel in nature than adults and if they are deprived of hanging out with their friends at night just because the area is dangerous at that particular hour, they are going to react to that rebelliously.
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sneak out of their houses after that particular time to meet their gangs and break the law.
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was mentioned previously, wiping out the issue is not going to help. Violence should be taken seriously, and by
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it is to say that governments must try to provide citizens with much calmer neighbourhoods and assure them with increasing the number of officers who are guarding different districts.
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it might be difficult to handle for the government at
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, it will surely bring them more benefits in future. Statistics represent that the areas which are under strong protection from the police
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has seen less violent crime and
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and others were in no fear of being threatened. Another thing that should not be missed is that, if a neighbourhood is not safe enough, neither an adult nor a teenager can take care of themselves. So just being accompanied by an older person can not necessarily bring protection. To sum up the given information, prevention has never offered a better situation. It only made things more complicated.
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serious action towards
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happenings, it better dig deeper and looks at the problem from other points of view. The priority must be finding the roots of
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an uncomfortable and unsafe situation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enforce
  • juvenile
  • repercussions
  • autonomy
  • adolescence
  • paternalistic
  • delinquency
  • municipality
  • ordinance
  • authoritarian
  • peer pressure
  • social dynamics
  • civil liberties
  • community policing
  • preventative measures
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