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Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In today's modern era, a
computer
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 is a very fundamental tool. Some people think that pupils should get used to operating it at
school
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.
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, there may be various risks if pupils depend on
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.
This
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 essay will highlight the advantages and disadvantages of the idea above.
To begin
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 with,
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 usually do their homework in a book during
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 life, while in the workplace, people do their job on a
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such
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 as analyzing data, creating reports, and presentations.
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, I work at a tech company where there are many data provided every day. I have to be able to understand the formula on Microsoft excel to make my job easier.
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, it will take days to analyze the data that I have.
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,
students
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 should learn how to operate
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 and their applications so that they will not find difficulties at work in the future. Other than that, I think by learning with
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,
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 can access the internet and get information as much as possible.
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, there are cons if depending on
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 for teaching.
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,
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 can access the internet free from their
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.
Students
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 who are supposed to study from the internet,
instead
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 use the opportunity to open a forbidden site
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 as online-game or porn.
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 will lead to unproductive time and addiction for them as well.
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,
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 are not cheap.
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 in my country, there are many unfortunate kids that can go to
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, let alone purchase a
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. I believe if
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 should be modernized,
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 the government should take part to give a subsidy so that the unfortunate kids can have a
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. In conclusion,
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 studying with
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 will bring benefits, I think the disadvantage weighs more than the advantages. I agree with the latter idea.
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