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In some places, young people find it difficult to communicate with older people. Why is this? What are the solutions?

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Somewhere in the world, teens think that it is quite tough to interact with
people
 who are different
ages
.
This
 seems to be a big problem of communication in the world, it affects the relation
better
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people
 in a different range of youth. The following paragraphs will outline the causes of
this
 issue and
also
 suggest some practical solutions. It is apparent that teenagers feel shy or not confident to talk with someone who is older than they are,
therefore
, the relationships of two persons or groups of
people
 will never begin.
For example
, from my experiences, my
friends
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want
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wanted
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 to be better at playing the guitar, but he was not confident
to
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 ask the older artists how to
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developed
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. As
the
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 result, he
got
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 back to his room and practised it himself. For other causes
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the
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different
attitudes
. It can be seen that the range of
ages
play
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 the role of individual
attitudes
,
such
 as
this
 incident,
while
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older
people
 think it is not appropriate to wear a bikini,
on the
contrary
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contrary,
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 young girls think there
was not
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anything
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nothing
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 wrong.
Moreover
, most
the
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 seniors are very confident in themselves, they will not let the younger
ages
 speak for them,
This
 cause is possible to be the major reason for
this
 problem. To tackle
this
 problem, there are several things we can change for better interactions between the different
ages
.
Firstly
, the seniors have to listen more to the children.
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they
are conflicting
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to
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 your
attitudes
, more
listen
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refer
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 to a more close
relation
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relationship
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.
Furthermore
,
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children should be respectful to everyone who is older than they are, even
the
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attitudes
 are
much
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 different,
but
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there is nothing wrong
to listen
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with listening
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. As
the
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a
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 result, it would be easier to communicate with everyone over the world. To summarize, difficult communication is mainly caused by individual backgrounds. They can change their
attitudes
 to open up their minds to new things they have never thought about.
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Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

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Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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