In some places, young people find it difficult to communicate with older people. Why is this? What are the solutions?

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Somewhere in the world, teens think that it is quite tough to interact with
people
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who are different
ages
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seems to be a big problem of communication in the world, it affects the relation
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people
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in a different range of youth. The following paragraphs will outline the causes of
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issue and
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suggest some practical solutions. It is apparent that teenagers feel shy or not confident to talk with someone who is older than they are,
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, the relationships of two persons or groups of
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will never begin.
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, from my experiences, my
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want
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to be better at playing the guitar, but he was not confident
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ask the older artists how to
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developed
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result, he
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back to his room and practised it himself. For other causes
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the
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different
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. It can be seen that the range of
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play
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the role of individual
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as
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incident,
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older
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think it is not appropriate to wear a bikini,
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young girls think there
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anything
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nothing
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wrong.
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, most
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seniors are very confident in themselves, they will not let the younger
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speak for them,
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cause is possible to be the major reason for
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problem. To tackle
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problem, there are several things we can change for better interactions between the different
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, the seniors have to listen more to the children.
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they
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to
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your
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, more
listen
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refer
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to a more close
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relationship
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.
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,
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children should be respectful to everyone who is older than they are, even
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are
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different,
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there is nothing wrong
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with listening
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. As
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result, it would be easier to communicate with everyone over the world. To summarize, difficult communication is mainly caused by individual backgrounds. They can change their
attitudes
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to open up their minds to new things they have never thought about.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological proficiency
  • communication gap
  • digital tools
  • worldviews
  • common ground
  • contemporary slang
  • informal language
  • misunderstandings
  • social hierarchy
  • cultural norms
  • stereotypes
  • prejudices
  • open communication
  • out of touch
  • inexperienced
  • effective communication
  • intergenerational programs
  • cross-generational activities
  • mutual respect
  • active listening
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