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Large companies and industries must provide sports and social facilities for local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#companies #industries #sports #facilities #communities
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People
tends
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 to struggle hard to reach the consensus on whether enormous organizations and associations should facilitate local communities with
sports
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 and social services or not? I partially agree with the provided theory and
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 essay with elaborate my vision. To commence with, during election campaigns the representatives of selected governments ought to nurture and flourish their corresponding States.
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, fabricating social and
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 activities is there is responsibility. They, often, collaborate with clubs and academies to prosper Talent and create leisure events. Considered the example of Canada, authoritative bodies along with local people organize recreational and
sports
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 events there.
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, imposing organizations and industrial States with the duties to look after and enhance our society socially and physically will burden them and divert their concentration
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economical
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 and production growth. One
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 incident was observed in California when a popular software company humongously debited itself by organizing a
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 event. Contrarily, the other aspect of the context cannot be ignored. Established industries and firms owe some responsibilities
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 the community. They can play their role by funding as they are credited enough to do so. They should keep
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sight of their surroundings and help someone who needs financial assistance. To reckon
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 the notion,
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 it is a common belief that large companies should arrange
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 and social events, that it can damage their growth
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, it is the government's elected bodies duty.
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financial Agencies must be appreciated.
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