Some people think that because children find subjects such as mathematics and philosophy difficult, they ought to be optional instead of compulsory. To what extent do you agree?
Nowadays, studying in
school
are
essential for childer because of their future career that they want to do as an adult. Change the verb form
is
hence
there is an argue
among people about curriculums. some beliefs, there several Replace the word
argument
skills
like mathematics and philosophy which are hard to learn for some student and those are not mandatory for all while the others like me disagree with them.
On the one hand, some lessons
like that mention above are fundamental skills
not only in school
but also
it is
vital for all people in daily Change the verb form
are
life
. Mathematical knowledge is necessary for improve our
logical thinking skill that we need it on different aspects of Change the pronoun
the
life
like our career or make a decision in critical sercomistances. In addition
, philosophy has been a vital part of human life
entire history. hence
, it is one of the fundamental skills
that we should deal with in program schools.
On the other hand
, all pupils do not have the same ability to learn and even some of them do not like some lessons
like math at all. in addition
, based on expertise investigation, when children opt their
favourite lesson, they are Change preposition
for their
enthusiasm
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enthusiastic
on
Change preposition
about
this
Correct determiner usage
these
skills
and can get more band score
. Dispute, if children are not learned those Fix the agreement mistake
scores
neccesery
Correct your spelling
necessary
skills
necessary skill( that I mention it in above
paragraph) may they face to Add an article
the above
crucial
problem on their future Add an article
the crucial
a crucial
life
.
in conclusion, although
children like to study some easier or favourable lessons
, they need to learn mathematic and philosophy in school
. So, in my idea, these lessons
should be compulsory before high school
but the curriculum should be more attractive for pupils.Submitted by mgolnari6 on
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