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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons and disadvantages of this trend?

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The world is changing a lot than the previous time, and people's living standards are improving.
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, many people choose to live differently versus their parents, and marrying lately or having
children
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 later is different. There are some reasons to lead
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 phenomenon and
also
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 bring the adverse effect to
society
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.
Firstly
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, the youth live in a modern and peaceful, safer world in the period of their parents who may suffer in war.
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, the young generation does not pressure to give birth to create the
labor
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 for servicing the
country
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.
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, my grandmother had ten
children
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, and more a half of them died in the military, but in my mother's generation, each family has two or three kids and no more.
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,
women
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 have received an education equally with men, so they have many purposes of achieving success in career paths, following their dreams, etc. Girls are not limited anymore about being a standard mother to fit
society
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's standards or having more opportunities to get higher education.
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,
this
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 trend causes some disadvantages for
women
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 and
society
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. Having
children
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 lately will cause some dangerous consequences for
women
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's health.
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, the worst thing is many
women
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 are unable to be pregnant after forty years old. To illustrate
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, my cousin's sister had to receive a child from other
women
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 because she was forty-two at that time, and she had no the ability to give a baby by herself.
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,
this
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 trend makes the families have one child because of their age, which leads to the
country
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's decreasing population. Japan is the
country
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that is
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 facing the lowest rate of young employees in their history; they have to make many benefits to encourage families to have more
children
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. In conclusion, some factors lead to the trend of deciding to have
children
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 later in
society
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, and it impacts few negative aspects for each woman and the
country
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prioritization
  • financial stability
  • educational prospects
  • personal development
  • health advancements
  • fertility options
  • economic uncertainties
  • parenthood
  • societal norms
  • life experience
  • generational gap
  • upbringing
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