Blood sports have become a hot topic for debate in recent years. As society develops it is increasingly seen as an uncivilized activity and cruel to the helpless animals that are killed. All blood sports should be banned.

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We live in a modern world where
people
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respect every life.As society develops it does not matter whether it is human or animal,
people
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try to save any lives.
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,there are
blood
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sports
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which
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are still legal.
People
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believe that all these types of
sports
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should be banned.
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essay will portray the opinion of both sides and my personal opinion in the conclusion. .
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with,
blood
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sports
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are a large part of our culture
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the ancient years as the source of adrenalin for spectators mainly .
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fightings were the best activity at every festival and
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the most gainful.
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people
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spend a significant amount of money for watching
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sports
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and the income from the festivales government spend for cities needs.
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,in
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century there was a festival city with a large population.
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can earn money only from the
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games
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there
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a
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result
unemployment
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of unemployment
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.If
blood
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games
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were manned in
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city, all local families became poor and died from starving as there were no
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apply
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fastiveles
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festivals
and
consequently
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a
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source of income.
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,now we live in a modern world with a lot of work and professions.
People
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do not need to gain money from the
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games
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as much as they used to in the past.We are a civilized society and try to protect every life from cruel murders.
Blood
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games
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one
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of the most popular
reason
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of
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for
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dying
animals
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nowadays.If we do not ban it,in the
next
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few years some animal species will be extinct.
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,
blood
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games
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between rabbits are very popular in China and now it is
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difficult to find
this
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type of animal there.Now
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the country
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has
deficit
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a deficit
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of rabbits and
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solve
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of
dustrupt
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disrupt
distrust
of the circulation of
animals
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. To sum up,
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sports
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are
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an inhumane activity, which causes pain and death to the
animals
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exploited. In my view, the dreadful game should be extirpated.
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, it should be a combined effort of the government and the
people
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to make sure that
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sporting activity is effaced.
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