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Nowadays more and more children are being brought up in single-parent families. What are the causes of this? What effects can be seen as a result of this?

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Recently, no
one
 can deny the fact that raising
kids
 in families with only
one
parent
 has been a trend.
This
 essay will examine the causes as well as the problems related to
this
 tendency. There are a number of reasons for
this
 trend.
To begin
 with, the main factor of bringing up
children
 in
this
 type of family is that a variety of
people
 do not appreciate family values. It is easy for them to get divorced after few arguments as there is a misunderstanding between husband and wife,
although
 upbringing
children
 need the contribution of both parents. Another contributing factor to mention is that many
people
 pass away at an early age.
Therefore
, the other partner takes all the responsibility to bring up their
kids
 alone. Unsurprisingly, there are some significant problems that should be concerned. The greatest of these is that the lack of education from
one
 of the parents may lead to loneliness among
children
. They can compare themselves with their peer who has complete families and feels unhappy. Another problem no less important is that the loss of
one
parent
 can be the cause of
children
’s disrespectful behaviours. Being a single
parent
 sometimes makes it difficult to supervise
children
 because they remain busy at work.
As a result
, young
people
 may behave improperly or violently. In conclusion, we can see that bringing up
children
 alone has many detrimental effects which are not beneficial for the
kids
' future. For
this
 reason,
people
 should avoid raising
kids
 in single-
parent
parent
 families and try to take care of them.
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