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Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The international sporting occasion, especially the football Worldcup were held in various
countries
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 with a huge amount of soccer
teams
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 and fans, which has made it became one of the most well-known
events
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. These sporting occasions play an integral characteristic in easing international tensions in difficult times and show nationalism in a proper way.
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, these global occasions are not only competitive but
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 a chance for participates to earn their spurs and glories for their
countries
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 with all their enthusiasm.
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, these
events
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 are
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 a special occasion for these
countries
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 to show their cultures and a perfect time for those who are mesmerized by sports to cheer for their
favorite
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teams
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 or participants.
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, when their participants win a match, they wear their
teams
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’ shirts, buy national flags or stick their national symbol stickers on their faces, or even held a parade as a congratulation for the success of their
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.
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 that, the rare situation of a footballer whose name is
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 is an ordinary example that proves how these global sporting
events
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 bring nations together. After
Eriksen
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 had a stroke, the Denmark team decided not to postpone the match;
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, when the Finland team had a goal, there was no cheer for Finland because of respect to
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.
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, there were numerous wishes and respect from other football
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 to
Eriksen
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, which show human love and sympathy among
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 to each other. In conclusion, I hold the view that sporting
events
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 play an irreplaceable role in gathering international relationships and liberating patriotic feelings.
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