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Teenagers should not be allowed to use mobile phones at school. To what extent to do you agree?

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Thanks to globalisation and revolution in the communication industry, almost everyone can afford to have a cellular phone. Some people are against the
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 by teenagers in schools as
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 modern trend affect the learning abilities of adolescents. I totally agree with the idea for the following reasons.
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 and foremost, the utilisation of cellphones in educational institutes divert the focus of pupils and has a negative
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 on their schooling grades as well as learning capabilities. Alongside,
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are important to grasp the knowledge and facts that are taught in learning institutes. The
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, during the live class can make the pupil absent by mind; he would miss the invaluable information imparted by teachers. Moving
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, the
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 is like
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wastage of time as most of the
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 browse unwanted apps
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 of getting useful information from
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.
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,
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 trend would arouse unnecessary competition for the possession of expensive
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 and could create
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 complex among those who cannot afford fancy cellular
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 on account of financial predicament. To conclude
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, I agree with the aforementioned statement as students might
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 for surfing unwanted apps like porn and others for entertainment that disturbs the concentration and environment of a classroom.
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