Extreme sports sush as skydiving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned to what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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Nowadays, extreme games are trendy around the world.

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, there are a lot of dangers that could be risky to players. Some perceive that extreme fun should be banned because of risky issues.

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essay disagrees with the aforementioned statement to prevented extreme athletics and provides reasons to support

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point of view before the conclusion is reached.

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of all, playing the extreme game is safe when there are in control of someone who profession in

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sport.It is no case for all communities who get death from playing with trained force.

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, there are a thousand cases a year that play without force control. It is apparent that playing with trained personnel could be safe to play extreme fun.

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, there are excessive issues that support extreme games that should not be banned.

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with,the principle of liberty, the crowd could do anything whatever could not affect another family, extreme athletics is not affected other public too.

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,it can promote the tourist industry

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the main earning in some countries.

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,there is an exciting activity that can treat the crowd with depression and some families who want to catch a new experience. To sum up,while extreme athletics is dangerous,it can be safe by a team and make more disadvantages than positive issues if it will be banned.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

225 words

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Extreme sports sush as skydiving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned to what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Scientists agree that many people eat too much junk food and it is damaging their health. Some people think that this problem can be solved by educating people, while others believe that education will not work. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Average rainfall for australia for last year by month

In many cities the population is increasing. Some say that the urbanization process denies us knowing our neighbors, and this causes a loss of community sense. What is the main problem with this? What measures can be taken to overcome it?

You are unable to attend the farewell party for your manager at work. Write a letter to him/her. In your letter: say why you can’t come tell them what you valued about working for him/her give him/her your best wishes.