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The internet has made knowledge immediately available to people through computers and smartphones all around the world. Much of this knowledge is also free. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend

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Modern technology
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 opened a vast chest of
information
 to mankind through various gadgets. Most of these are offered without a price instantly to cater
our
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 needs. The impending essay will discuss how
this
 has revolutionalized the learning process and
also
 the aftermath if any. One of the main advantages of technology that we have seen during these pandemic days is how it helped students to pursue education from home when the
situtaion
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 for a classroom study. Using online resources they were able to complete their projects on time rather than depending on extra tutions which may be hard to afford.
Moreover
, a lot of free education sites with a plethora of subjects help people study the topic of their interest rather than choosing only from that which is regularly offered in universities. Having said these pros, there underlies a danger in the authenticity of
information
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 available through
this
 media. Not every website could be trusted and false
informations
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information
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 could be spread
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 an alarmingly high rate.
For instance
 , in 2011 a fake news about
stock
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the stock
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 value crash in
LG
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 company,set the frantic
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stakeholders
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stake holders
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 to sell out their shares at a very low rate. There is no regulatory body that monitors the flow of
information
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internet
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that is
 setback compared to its immense uses.
A proper
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 legislation about the contents put up in
this
 media might solve the case. To conclude, there is no doubt that
information
 technology has transformed the world and the benefits we have from it outweigh the drawbacks. Proper and legitimate circulation of knowledge
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online can
further
 enhance its power.
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