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some people claim that not enough of waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extend do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

recycling is a crucial method that needs to be taken into attention in order to protect
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 but as
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clear
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 it's not taking serious in nowadays and it's because
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people
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 worth it to consider Because of their
lasiness
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laziness
business
 and lack of knowledge So without a question
government
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 should take actions and use methods like adding
penalty
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people
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serious
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.
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 do not pay attention to recycling because of various
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reasons the, tow main of them would be
lasiness
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laziness
business
 and lack of information about recycling.In
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 modern
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days
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people
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 rather
to
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do things as quickly as possible because technologies are moving in a way to help
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 do their routines quickly,
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mobile applications.So in
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world
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people
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 choose to do the easiest way, so they try not to change regular trash from recyclable ones, and
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sufficient
 recycling trash would be collected.As the
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disscussing
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discussing
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 point , there is lack of information among residents of an area, because of the fact that there are not enough advertisements
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being
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 field, they
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don't
 have the scientific facts of
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 event and its advantages
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therefore
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 they
dont
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don't
seprate
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separate
 normal trash from others that can be recycled. As
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discussed in
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last
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people
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government
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the government
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 to recycle garbages so
government
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 should take
actions
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 and push
people
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 into co-operation Who is Eddington all teas and the rewards for
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 obey the rules and ones who help the
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 respectively.Because of the fact that every person
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 not like
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 would be a great solution, like car driving
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strict
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instruct
 laws that brings almost completely
safety
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 for
people
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 in transportation. And as another solution
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 should advertise in
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 area by providing enough money, as it was mentioned before
people
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 need to be informed and one of the best ways is to advertise. Almost
each
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 individual person has phones and families usually have
TV
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 in their homes so
with
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 advertisements,
considerable
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a considerable
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 number of
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in to
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 serious.  Overall as we can observe the importance of recycling and its benefits, but because of a few
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 of
people
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 who don'
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 take it essential, governments have to take actions
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 as advertising and laws with
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a penalty
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penalty
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penalties
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 for
people
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 with showing no responsibility
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 recycling so
finally
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this
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 would be a duty for everyone to recycle their recyclable waste.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Waste management
  • Recycling
  • Sustainability
  • Mandatory
  • Voluntary
  • Legislative measures
  • Environmental impact
  • Public awareness
  • Regulation
  • Sanctions
  • Compliance
  • Recycling facilities
  • Consumer behavior
  • Waste reduction
  • Resource conservation
  • Circular economy
  • Eco-friendly
  • Biodegradable
  • Landfill
  • Global initiative
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