Many people believe that the high levels of violence in films today are causing serious social problems. What are these problems and how could they be reduced?

Nowadays, it is frequently argued that people are influenced by the violence expressed in films as a consequence that they could have a social problem. In
this
essay, I will explain some problems connected with the statement and
then
I try to give a solution to solve the situation.
Firstly
, I think that
film
can influence people not only with violence but
also
with beneficial
behavior
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, and for
this
reason, I believe that it is important to filter the information provided, in
fact
, when we watch a
film
sometimes we remember only a few scenes, maybe the most significant, and often they are linked with violent actions.
Although
I love action
Films
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, I think that it is essential to understand the difference between a
film
and reality and
this
could be the
first
stage for reducing the social problems due to the
fact
that sometimes, especially children, try to reproduce the same actions or movements in real life and
this
can be dangerous.
Moreover
, I think that
the
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violent scenes could lead to
reduce
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the sensibility, in
fact
, today when we read
news
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or we hear about
death
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people we do not feel emotions due to the
fact
that we are steadily influenced by violence that we
do not care no
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more. In conclusion, I believe that we must understand the difference between
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reality and a
film
because we are going to be insensitive in front of real sufferance expressed by media as a consequence that we watch everyday violent scenes
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • desensitization
  • empathy
  • aggressive behaviors
  • imitation
  • antisocial behavior
  • normalization
  • climate of fear
  • perceptions
  • mental health
  • aggression
  • emotional regulation
  • trauma-related symptoms
  • age ratings
  • critical viewing skills
  • nonviolent entertainment
  • film industry
  • regulate
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