Many people believe that the high levels of violence in films today are causing serious social problems. What are these problems and how could they be reduced?

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Nowadays, it is frequently argued that people are influenced by the violence expressed in films as a consequence that they could have a social problem. In

this

essay, I will explain some problems connected with the statement and

then

I try to give a solution to solve the situation.

Firstly

, I think that

film

can influence people not only with violence but

also

with beneficial

behavior

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, and for

this

reason, I believe that it is important to filter the information provided, in

fact

, when we watch a

film

sometimes we remember only a few scenes, maybe the most significant, and often they are linked with violent actions.

Although

I love action

Films

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, I think that it is essential to understand the difference between a

film

and reality and

this

could be the

first

stage for reducing the social problems due to the

fact

that sometimes, especially children, try to reproduce the same actions or movements in real life and

this

can be dangerous.

Moreover

, I think that

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violent scenes could lead to

reduce

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the sensibility, in

fact

, today when we read

news

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or we hear about

death

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people we do not feel emotions due to the

fact

that we are steadily influenced by violence that we

do not care no

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more. In conclusion, I believe that we must understand the difference between

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reality and a

film

because we are going to be insensitive in front of real sufferance expressed by media as a consequence that we watch everyday violent scenes

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Topic Vocabulary:

desensitization
empathy
aggressive behaviors
imitation
antisocial behavior
normalization
climate of fear
perceptions
mental health
aggression
emotional regulation
trauma-related symptoms
age ratings
critical viewing skills
nonviolent entertainment
film industry
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Many people believe that the high levels of violence in films today are causing serious social problems. What are these problems and how could they be reduced?

Fully explain your ideas

Many young people today leave their own countries to work abroad. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages on working abroad and give your own opinion.

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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars

Many people say that university education should only be offered to young students with the highest marks, while others say they should accept people with varying marks and all ages, even if they did not do well. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

There is a historical building in your town and the city council wants to pull it down because there is no money for repairs. You are not happy with this decision. Write a letter to the city council and say Why is the building important? Suggest a solution to finance the repairs.