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college students from three countries spend on different living costs each year. agree or disagree?

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The table illustrates the percentage of expenditure which college
students
 from three
countries
 spend on different living costs each year. Overall, it is clear that the total expenditure of
country
 A was higher than the spending of
students
 in
countries
B
 and
C
. In all
countries
,
students
 spent the most proportion on accommodation and food.
In
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country
 A, the total spending of
students
 is the highest at 5000$ per year, compared to
country
B
 and
C
 which were 4500$ and 1500$ respectively.
Accommodation’s
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The accommodation’s
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 rate accounted for 45% of the total expenditure in
country
 A, while it was lower for
students
 in
country
B
 at 35% and
country
C
 at 30%.
However
, in
term
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terms
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 of food,
students
 in
country
C
 spend the largest proportion of their money on it, were at 36%. The
students
 in
country
C
also
 spent a high percentage of their budget on books (21%), while the least spending on books is
country
 A.
By contrast
, Leisure was high expended by
students
 in
country
 A and
B
 around 22.5% whereas
country
C
 expended the least on
this
 cost.
Furthermore
, the average of other living costs in
three
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the three
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countries
were
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was
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 approximately 4.5%.
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