It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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disputed that
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their
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about their own personality improvement and safety while others believe punishment is
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way about learning
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wrong or right. I completely agree with
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reasons which are going to explain in the following paragraphs.
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parents
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aim to protect their
children
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so they establish some rules upon their
children
behaviours.
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ban that their
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contact unknown
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,
children
can not predict misuse from other
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,
children
do not improve not only cognitive thinking but
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perceptual approach. If they are abused ,probably, they can not notice
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their
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safety.
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prefer to be flexible for their
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attitudes. According to them,
children
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or right
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themselves.
Similarly
, they advocate that
parents
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but
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friend
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Furthermore
, numerous experts support that
children
should make new friends and establish good communication in order to become
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in career life, mostly could not quality contact
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friends in their childhood. In conclusion,
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children
from potential
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whereas they should not inhibit their
children
psychological and personalities improvement.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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