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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

#humans #environment #governments #address #people
It is true that
people
 contribute to
the
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environment
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 pollution in various ways, while both
governments
 and individual
people
 can take steps to
tuckle
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tackle
 these problems Human activities are the main reasons for damaging the
environment
. The commute service of
people
 could have a detrimental impact on the
environment
. We are not able to have access to
more
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 convenient lifestyle and better qualities of life without private
viehicles
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vehicles
. Nowadays each family has at least one private car, and cars could emit CO2 gas, which could result in greenhouse gas. It is well-known that
the
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climate change mainly results from greenhouse gas.
Therefore
, transportation could not be
ignorated
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ignored
 in terms of damaging the
environment
.
However
,
governments
 could take a series of measures to solve the problem mentioned above.
Governments
 could invest more money in
the
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public facilities, and more
people
 are likely to take
the
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public transportation rather than private cars.
Moreover
,
governments
 could
also
 increase the tax, when
people
 purchase private cars, and more
people
 could become involved in public transport.
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Individuals
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Individual
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An individual
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 could
also
 protect the
environment
 from their own daily lives.
For example
,
people
 could choose to use recycling bags
instead
 of
disposal
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 plastic bags when they go shopping. In conclusion, the
environment
 has been damaged by
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a human
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human
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humans
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 in different ways. All
governments
, societies and individuals should work together to prevent the
environment
 from getting worse.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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