In some cultures, children are encouraged to compete against each other. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this approach?

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present, there are many skilled people in

this

world. Many

children

are expected to be more talented and competitive with

others

. As can be seen in Thai society,

children

are expected from their

parents

to be popular and in high-ranked

schools

since kindergarten, repeating in primary

schools

, secondary

schools

and universities.

This

can foster their mindset to compete against each other.

Therefore

, being competitive can greatly affect

children

in both positive and negative ways, which

this

essay tends to discuss on the two sides.

To begin

, there are many challenging tasks that encourage

human

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to be competitive.

For instance

, the education system and prizes from adults award to top-performing

children

in classes, or

parents

give rewards from getting full marks on examinations. Continue to the career paths that companies choose to employ the most qualified applicants. Since

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looked down

by

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their

parents

with high expectations and different perspectives,

children

try to raise themselves up to beat adults' contempt. To simplify, reaching goals is to complete the tasks.

Children

are trained to be diligent and responsible.

Thus

, the expected results will be satisfying, which is the advantage in competing that they will produce quality outcomes.

However

, competitions tend to shape

children

some bad behaviours,

such

as unfriendly manners, selfishness, and cruelty to

others

as they have to be superior

than

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others

.

Moreover

,

parents

’ pressure and expectation affect the

children

’s physical and mental health. To explain, forcing

children

to study extra classes or

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academic books can cause them mental distress as well as bad ergonomic physical positions. Even though, skills and talents competing against

others

do not only shape

children

to be diligent and have good

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but

also

negatively affect

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children

’s

mind

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and

body

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.

Therefore

,

children

and

parents

have to balance positive and negative effects to be successful. As can be seen in Thai society, beginning from kindergarten that their parent expected them to be in popular and high-ranked primary

schools

, again in secondary

schools

and universities. Even, looking down from adults for who have different paths from the expectation or the failure. So,

children

to

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raise themselves up to beat the expectations and successes.