Prison is the common way in most countries try to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education. Do you agree or disagree?

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commonly used in many
countries
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to solve the causes of
crime
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.
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,
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literacy
rate
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is the more effective solution.
This
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essay agrees with the statement because it gives us employment and
development
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.
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of all, By providing
education
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to as
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people
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you can show a decline in
crime
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rate
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because the more they
study
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then
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they can get to know what is good for them but
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what is bad to them as well as the more
people
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study
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then
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they can induce in the
jobs
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. Through, Which we can see a dramatic decrease in the
crime
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rates like educated
people
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will
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in their
jobs
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they don't get
time
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for thinking about these things. So,
government
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the government
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should have to publish the scheme as well as
law
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to increase the
education
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facilities through which those who cannot afford their
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material can
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get
study
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through policies.
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, As educated
people
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don't get
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to think over
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because they have many project from their
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and returning back from their
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at night,evening ,etc.
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they want to spend with their family,friends and others to enjoy their life as well. Which put them away from crimes and usually educated society used to spend their
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gaining and learning new skills is
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a positive
development
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and shows
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a reduction
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in
crime
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rate
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as well as
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this
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helps in
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development
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the development
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of the country like many developed
countries
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have high literacy
rate
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than the developing and undeveloped
countries
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.
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, Developed
countries
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are advanced than other underdeveloped and developing
countries
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in many aspects like health, infrastructure.
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,
Countries
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have to spend more on
education
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as well as in
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the health
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care field. So, That more the
people
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are educated and healthy more will be the growing nation. To conclude, I strongly believe that
education
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is beneficial in reducing
crime
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as well as and
development
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of the country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tackles root causes
  • preventative approach
  • critical thinking
  • decision-making skills
  • recidivism rates
  • equipping
  • socio-economic benefits
  • underlying factors
  • poverty
  • ignorance
  • lack of opportunities
  • rehabilitation
  • ineffective
  • higher rates of re-offending
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