Prison is the common way in most countries try to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education. Do you agree or disagree?

Prison
are
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commonly used in many
countries
to solve the causes of
crime
.
On the other hand
,
increased
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an increased
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literacy
rate
is the more effective solution.
This
essay agrees with the statement because it gives us employment and
development
.
First
of all, By providing
education
to as
much
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people
you can show a decline in
crime
rate
because the more they
study
then
they can get to know what is good for them but
also
what is bad to them as well as the more
people
study
then
they can induce in the
jobs
. Through, Which we can see a dramatic decrease in the
crime
rates like educated
people
will
indulges
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in their
jobs
they don't get
time
for thinking about these things. So,
government
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the government
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should have to publish the scheme as well as
law
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a law
the law
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to increase the
education
facilities through which those who cannot afford their
study
material can
also
get
study
through policies.
Secondly
, As educated
people
don't get
time
to think over
those topic
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because they have many project from their
jobs
and returning back from their
jobs
at night,evening ,etc.
Althrough
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Although
, The remaining
time
they want to spend with their family,friends and others to enjoy their life as well. Which put them away from crimes and usually educated society used to spend their
time
gaining and learning new skills is
also
a positive
development
and shows
reduction
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a reduction
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in
crime
rate
as well as
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this
helps in
development
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the development
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of the country like many developed
countries
have high literacy
rate
than the developing and undeveloped
countries
.
Therefore
, Developed
countries
are advanced than other underdeveloped and developing
countries
in many aspects like health, infrastructure.
However
,
Countries
have to spend more on
education
as well as in
health
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care field. So, That more the
people
are educated and healthy more will be the growing nation. To conclude, I strongly believe that
education
is beneficial in reducing
crime
as well as and
development
of the country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tackles root causes
  • preventative approach
  • critical thinking
  • decision-making skills
  • recidivism rates
  • equipping
  • socio-economic benefits
  • underlying factors
  • poverty
  • ignorance
  • lack of opportunities
  • rehabilitation
  • ineffective
  • higher rates of re-offending
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