Parents often buy their children many toys. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children having a large number of toys?

Nowadays, children receive a number of
toys
during
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childhood and
this
fact
could have some beneficial and adverse consequences. In
this
essay, I will discuss
pros
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and cons and
then
I will focus on
child's
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behaviour.
Firstly
, I think one of the most disadvantages is that a child, who has got many
toys
, can not really understand the real value of the object, in
fact
, sometimes, especially the youth, we have
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things that we do not know,
for example
, I
remeber
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remember
when I opened my wardrobe and I found
cloeths
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clothes
that I did not know to have. The same topic is around the
toys
for children
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fact
more tools for playing they have, more of them they would like to have because the will never be
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fulfilment
and there will be always a lack of
somethings
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. The
fact
is provided by the past when our grandfather used to play with only one or two
toys
and they enjoyed more what they had
instead
of our society.
Although
having many games can be useless, I believe
also
that if
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parents would like to make happy their kids, they can gift a toy and
this
is
also
a beneficial
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for older people in light
on
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the
fact
that I
remeber
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remember
when my mother used to buy an object for me when I was good in something
for example
when I got a good mark at school or when I scored during the football match. In conclusion, in my
opinion
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there are some adverse consequences in having a number of
toys
because the children will not
apreciate
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appreciate
them but it is
also
important to gift something as
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.
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