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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Overall, the widespread use of the internet has a mostly positive effect on life in today’s world.

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In
this
 technological era, widespread
usage
 of
internet
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 has
mostly
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 positive impact on
life
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the life
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 of
people
. I completely agree with
this
 notion and relevant reasons will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. The
first
 and foremost reason for
wide
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usage
 of
internet
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the internet
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 is, in
this
 modernised age, the power of communication has increased manifold. A person can effortlessly communicate all over the globe by ample
of
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social
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media
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medias
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media
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such
 as Facebook,WhatsApp or Telegram. They can communicate easily and effectively from longer distances with one another.
Furthermore
, the trend of online education, meetings, concerts can be widely witnessed
to
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 many countries.Many huge MNCs have
its
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 competent workforce
at
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 many parts of the world.
This
 has resulted in that individuals have become active and reliable. Another clear reason is,
people
 in the former
time share
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 their views with the small part of the society whereas in modern time
people
 have a big platform to share their views,beliefs,ideas and suggestions to society. All
this
 information is shared as fast as lightning with the enormous social media platforms. In a recent study conducted by James Hook at Harvard
University
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 it was revealed that the
usage
 of
internet
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 has
rose
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 by 60 % from
last
 10 years all over the globe.
Moreover
, with the advent of
internet
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people
 are greatly benefitted.
For
example
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 an individual
do
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 not really need to work from
office
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the office
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 or
teacher
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the teacher
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 do not have to give lectures only from schools.
This
 has given
a
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relaxation from hectic schedules and the person can easily live flexible routine.
Besides
this
, the physicality aspect is no more significant in today's digital era.
This
 has
also
 resulted in the reduction of time and
efforts
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. To sum up I consider that
internet
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 has greatly impacted the
people
 of
this
 modern world and
this
 future
also
 it will surely broaden its way to benefit them.The widespread
usage
 of
internet
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 has a positive effect on
the
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people
 in today's world.
Submitted by Naina  on

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