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All education (primary, secondary and university education) should be free to all people, and paid and managed by the government. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is argued that free
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 should be provided for all people at all levels, from primary school to university, and the government should be the one that pays and manages educational institutions. In my opinion, I completely agree with
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 suggestion, as not all individuals have the ability to pay for
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.
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, an educated community is the main reason for the nation's economic development. Everyone should have the same opportunity to get an
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 because it is their human right. Despite that, some could pay for
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, but
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 is not the case with families who suffer from poverty. Because these individuals have more priorities
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 as food and home, and if they do not get educated their poverty will extend to more generations.
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, if schools are not free of charge , the children's parents will not allow their children to go to school.
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, when they grow up they will not be able to have a good job and the poverty cycle continue to the next generation.
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, free
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 actually could benefit the country's
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 and will save them more money. Educated people tend to avoid breaking the law and focus more on their future, which leads to boosting the nation's
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.
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, most countries that have the biggest
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 as China and Japan, have the best free educational system.
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, providing
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 free of charge may have a high return on investment to the country. In conclusion, I believe all individuals should have access to free
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 equally because it boosts the
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 in the long term and it is a human right of the ones who cannot afford to pay for it.

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Try to include more specific examples to support your points.
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Use linking words to make connections between ideas clearer.
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You presented clear arguments for your opinion.
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Your introduction and conclusion are strong and summarize your main idea well.
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