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Many people lose their income due to CoVid19 pandemic. What solution that can do by government or individual to overcome this problem.

According to
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 coronavirus-19 outbreaks worldwide, some countries
put
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have made
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the
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an
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 effort to tackle the
circumstance
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situation
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 by spending more funds and
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implementing lockdown
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lockdowns
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lockdown
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lockdown,
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 that effect to
failure
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the failure
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 of the economic system, making reduce household revenue.
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this
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 situation, the essay will offer some solutions to
get
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apply
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deal with the issue by both governments and people. The main problem of lockdown nation is the struggle of international business, especially tourism and export industries,
it
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which
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 means that some population who have
ever
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apply
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been working in
relative
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apply
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this
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 business
,
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apply
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receiving
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are
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effect
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affected
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 on unable sales product like the same.
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, reducing family revenue can be alleviated by first having support from the government.
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, the Prime Minister should be
mention
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mentioned
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 in the effective management
in
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of
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 crisis situations and monitored by
heard
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hearing
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 some voices from their people.
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, the determination policy should be
lockdown
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locked down
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 in some areas and decrease the rate of taxes
for helping
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to help
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the person
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people
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 who
lacks
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lack
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 money using in daily life. Another equally vital solution is the
collaborative
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collaboration
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 of individual and private organisation sessions to
inhabit
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address
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 the outbreaks of COVID and the creation of alternative careers for unemployed people. The new normal lifestyle of the community can be seen
and
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, and
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 maybe occurred new job
in
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has occurred in
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the
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this
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 era. Because
individual
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individuals
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 should keep social distancing
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methods
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method
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method,
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that
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which
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effects
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affects
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to
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apply
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the difficulty of
increase more
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increasing
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 money and
communicates
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communicating
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by face to face
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face-to-face
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. The huge funds by the major organisations can
ameliorate
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be ameliorated
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 by
play
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playing
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 an effective role as
owner
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owners
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 of a new industry in the country.
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, the application for shopping online and cheaper delivery can employ new
merchant
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merchants
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 and some graduates to link
this
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 business and
develops
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develop
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 sustainable jobs onward.
To sum up
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, the issue needs to
immediately
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be immediately
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improve
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improved
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throughout
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through
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 collaboration
not
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, not
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 only
governments
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between governments
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or
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and
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 some organisations
but
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, but
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also
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all
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among all
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citizens
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citizens,
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 to stop the widespread of COVID-19.
Moreover
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, the problem should be addressed by developing sustainable employment in each country in order
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not to
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 rely on
just only
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apply
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international industries.

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coherence
Use clear topic sentences to show your main idea at the start of each paragraph.
task
Add facts or steps to show how ideas work in real life.
language
Check grammar and make phrases flow better.
style
Keep ideas simple and short sentences for ease of reading.
content
The essay shows how gov and people can help at once.
structure
There is a clear end that sums up the view.
content
The writer shows ideas about new jobs and online shop help.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial aid
  • Unemployment benefits
  • Job creation
  • Essential services
  • Small businesses
  • Tax relief
  • Retraining
  • Upskilling
  • Remote work
  • Digital infrastructure
  • Mental health
  • Stress management
  • Community support
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Self-employed
  • Pandemic
  • Income loss
  • Workforce
  • Subsidies
  • Telecommuting
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