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In some countries, secondary schools aim to provide a general education across a range of subjects. In others, children focus on a narrowly range of subjects related to a particular career. Which do you think is appropriate in today's world?

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Introduction
Do you believe that
movie-experience
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movie experience
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 has just come
in
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 my life, three months ago? Whereas I started reading a book since I was a kid, I more often enjoy watching films when I became a late sixteenth-year-old. As
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 changed, I immediately realized that there are two differences between
books
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 and
movies
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.
Body paragraph 1
The role of the ears is the
first
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 total difference. We use
ears
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 to listen to the sounds from the
movies
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.
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, a book is silent while we are reading. Since I always watch English
movies
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, they help me get used to a variety of accents.
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, I have to surf the internet or ask many native speakers to hear the different voices of words.
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,
movies
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 give me various emotions because of their music, including Freesound, but
books
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 do give me not many, perhaps they don’t if I have no clue about some contexts and sequences. For these reasons, ear use is undoubtedly the cause of
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 difference.
Body paragraph 2
The
next
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 organ which can speak is in focus. Because most
movies
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 that I watched were played by native speakers, I was able to speak and pronounce each word correctly follow the characters. Unlike
movies
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, I listen to myself reading
books
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 with inaccurate voices and speech; the traditional way to check whether it is correct or not is to have a look at an IPA in a dictionary. How a mouth play role in
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 way is
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 the
second
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 reason why
books
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 and
movies
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 are not similar.
Conclusion
To sum up, a huge couple of things that cause differences between
books
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 and
movies
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 are how ears and mouth function
in
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is
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 not the same way.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • versatility
  • adaptability
  • well-rounded
  • knowledge base
  • critical thinking
  • informed decisions
  • specialized fields
  • career-focused
  • deeper understanding
  • skillset
  • integration
  • balanced education model
  • exposure
  • secondary education
  • professional life
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