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The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, the
lives
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 and relationships of
celebrities
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such
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 as actors, singers or footballers get more media attention than the
lives
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 of ordinary
people
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.
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, with personal opinion, I totally ague that
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 should be fair between famous
people
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 and normal persons.
Celebrities
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 often have salient features about a certain field
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 as wealthy heritage, fashion style and beauty instructor… They have many fans because they believe in the interesting life of
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 bringing comfort and luxury. They take
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 as an ideal model to try better for their
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.
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, there is a motivation for a perfect life.
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, not only famous
people
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 but ordinary
people
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also
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 have quite special
lives
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. Volunteers help
people
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 in need, individuals who share foreign language learning methods, soft skills, and handle situations in life based on their experience.
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 is
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 quite necessary for some individuals who have not had the experience.
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, a lot of
people
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 don't really care because they think these are the little things. In conclusion, I think the
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 of
celebrities
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 and ordinary
people
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 are equally important depending on each person. It means that they all have their own special things that are hard to compare and they are all worthy of media attention.
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