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The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, the
lives
 and relationships of
celebrities
such
 as actors, singers or footballers get more media attention than the
lives
 of ordinary
people
.
However
, with personal opinion, I totally ague that
this
 should be fair between famous
people
 and normal persons.
Celebrities
 often have salient features about a certain field
such
 as wealthy heritage, fashion style and beauty instructor… They have many fans because they believe in the interesting life of
celebrities
 bringing comfort and luxury. They take
this
 as an ideal model to try better for their
lives
.
Also
, there is a motivation for a perfect life.
In contrast
, not only famous
people
 but ordinary
people
also
 have quite special
lives
. Volunteers help
people
 in need, individuals who share foreign language learning methods, soft skills, and handle situations in life based on their experience.
This
 is
also
 quite necessary for some individuals who have not had the experience.
However
, a lot of
people
 don't really care because they think these are the little things. In conclusion, I think the
lives
 of
celebrities
 and ordinary
people
 are equally important depending on each person. It means that they all have their own special things that are hard to compare and they are all worthy of media attention.
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