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What are the pros and cons for children of watching television? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your knowledge or experience

#children #television
With
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 in the technological advancements,
paradigm
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 shift has been observed in the viewership of
television
.
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 late, it has been recorded that
children
 watching
television
 has outmatched adults.
This
 sudden shift is embedded with some pros and cons which are discussed in forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with, on one hand,
television
 acts as
stress
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 buster for
children
 after their stressful school hours.
Television
 acts as
catalyst
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 in changing the erratic mood of
kids
. TV shows like “Tom and Jerry” incorporates child
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 which is said to pacify
children
.
Moreover
,
television
 keeps
children
 preoccupied, so that
kids
 cannot bother their parents while working.
For instance
, a recent survey conducted by “Global Times” stated that 80% of parent’s use
television
 as a tool to control
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 of their
kids
.
On the other hand
,
Firstly
,
Television
 can be addictive. Makers of TV shows or cartoons
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 directs a play with the sole purpose of attracting the young minds and to cause addiction. Cartoons can hamper
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 life of a child if watched in excess.
Moreover
, Addiction caused by
television
 can lead to serious health issues like obesity and dry eyes.
Secondly
,
Kids
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 tender age, do not understand morals. They often misjudge fantasy
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 reality.
This
 can create grieve issues.
For instance
, a recent newspaper headline stated that a 7 years old kid, somewhere in Japan, jumped off from the building pretending to be “The Superman”. In conclusion, there are advantages and disadvantages of
children
 watching
television
, with proper parental guidance cons can be mitigated to some extent.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • engaging
  • linguistic skills
  • exposure
  • inappropriate content
  • distort
  • optimizing
  • debate
  • implications
  • viewing habits
  • parental guidance
  • educational programs
  • screen time
  • stereotypes
  • unhealthy behaviors
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